IPP> SEC - Some more editing comments on Security draft

IPP> SEC - Some more editing comments on Security draft

IPP> SEC - Some more editing comments on Security draft

Carl-Uno Manros cmanros at cp10.es.xerox.com
Fri Jul 18 20:27:03 EDT 1997


Roger,


here are my additional comments as promissed:


Editorial comments on the Security draft from July 15
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TOC   The lines for 5.9 and 5.10 are not aligned with the rest of the TOC.


Section 5.10 - I already gave you some advice on how to get rid of the
issue, by stating that a corresponding security level (but probably not
identical) should be used as for the submission of the job.


Section 6.0  - We need to add more references here for: TLS, PGP/MIME,
S/MIME, SHHTP, IPSec.  I would drop PEM and MOSS from this text, we do not
seem to have any interest in them at all and they now seem to be only of
historic value.  Under IPSec, 4th line from the end, you have "use user".
Cross out "use".


6.2  Firewall Considerations - add blank line after the heading.


Change "posts" to "POSTs"


7.0  References - there are a number of unexplained underscores - delete. 
Fix  "elkins" to "Elkins" in RFC2015 reference.  Some reference names are
capitalized and others are small letters, eg. we have "RFC" and sometimes
"rfc" in reference names.  Make consistent throughout the document. Use
same style as the Model document (whichever that is).


Find and add references for standards indicated above for section 6.0.



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Carl-Uno


Carl-Uno Manros
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