Hello,
I see a repetition below (blue color)
The 'certificate' IPP Authentication method uses X.509 certificate authentication via TLS. X.509 certificate authentication via TLS. This authentication method is initiated by the Printer by sending a Certificate Request message during the Transport Layer Security (TLS) [RFC5246] handshake.
I guess the intent was the following?
The 'certificate' IPP Authentication method uses X.509 certificate authentication via TLS. This authentication method is initiated by the Printer by sending a Certificate Request message during the Transport Layer Security (TLS) [RFC5246] handshake.
Best Regards,
Cihan Colakoglu
Kyocera Document Solutions
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Cc: ipp at pwg.org; Alan Sukert <alan.sukert at xerox.com>
Subject: Re: [IPP] Subject: Xerox has reviewed the IPP Authentication Methods and has one comment
Hi Smith and Alan,
I strongly prefer the two sentences solution.
We should all try to avoid long sentences with operational content in more than one
subclause, because they interfere w/ clarity.
Cheers,
- Ira
Ira McDonald (Musician / Software Architect)
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On Tue, Feb 26, 2019 at 10:17 AM Kennedy, Smith (Wireless & Standards Architect) <smith.kennedy at hp.com<mailto:smith.kennedy at hp.com>> wrote:
Thanks Alan! This editorial feedback is important, and I'll make this change before we go to Formal Vote. As an alternative, I could replace the "and" with a period, and make the second half of the (pretty long) sentence a new sentence, like so:
The 'certificate' IPP Authentication method uses X.509 certificate authentication via TLS. X.509 certificate authentication via TLS. This authentication method is initiated by the Printer by sending a Certificate Request message during the Transport Layer Security (TLS) [RFC5246] handshake.
Any strong opinions either way? I'm also not sure that I should be capitalizing "Authentication" in "The 'certificate' IPP Authentication method...".
Smith
On Feb 26, 2019, at 6:01 AM, Sukert, Alan <alan.sukert at xerox.com<mailto:alan.sukert at xerox.com>> wrote:
Minor comment (grammatically sentence did not read correctly; suggested addition is in red type) that can be ignored if needed to approve - Lines 272-274: The 'certificate' IPP Authentication method uses X.509 certificate authentication via TLS. X.509 certificate authentication via TLS and is initiated by the Printer by sending a Certificate Request message during the Transport Layer Security (TLS) [RFC5246] handshake.
Alan Sukert
Product Security Specialist
Xerox Research and Product Development/ Product Security and Development Process Controls
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[This PWG Last Call starts today, February 1, 2019, and ends Thursday, February 28, 2019 at 10pm US Pacific time.]
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