[MFD] High North has reviewed the FaxOut Service Semantic Model and Service Interface specification and has comments

[MFD] High North has reviewed the FaxOut Service Semantic Model and Service Interface specification and has comments

[MFD] High North has reviewed the FaxOut Service Semantic Model and Service Interface specification and has comments

Ira McDonald blueroofmusic at gmail.com
Mon Jun 13 21:48:22 UTC 2011


Hi,                                                Monday (13 June 2011)

High North has reviewed the FaxOut Service and has comments.

These augment the Apple and Lexmark comments and try to avoid overlap.

Cheers,
- Ira

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           [Comments on "wd-mfdfaxoutmodel10-20110503.pdf"]

- Global - inconsistent capitalization
- change "multifunction device" to "Multifunction Device" throughout

Line 179-180 - plurals should be singular
- change "abstract models include the functional models and interfaces
  of a FaxOutServices."
  to "abstract model include the functional model and interfaces
  of a FaxOutService."

Line 185-186 - wrong pronoun and singular should be plural
- change "Jobs with its associated to FaxOutJobTicket"
  to "Jobs with their associated to FaxOutJobTickets"

Line 188 - ambiguous verb
- change "execute" to "try to satisfy"


Line 192 - case error
- change "FaxOut templates" to "FaxOut Templates"

Line 195 and 196 - noun as verb (2 instances)
- change "to FaxOut" to "to send FaxOut Jobs"

Line 196 - word order
- change "batch job FaxOut" to "batch FaxOut Jobs"

- Line 196 - noun as verb
- change "automated FaxOut" to "automated sending"

Line 197 - missing word
- change "documents separated" to "documents each separated"

Line 198 - plural should be singular
- change "the FaxOutServices" to "a FaxOutService"

Line 205-208 - duplicate sentence
- delete second "There is no FaxOutService specific terminology."

Line 242 - wrong verb implies future standardization
- change "will be defined" to "could be defined"

Line 242 - plural should be singular
- change "FaxOutServices" to "FaxOutService"

Line 285-286 - missing reference
- should be section 6.1

Line 304, 414, and 643 - undefined term (3 instances)
- need to define "Job metadata"

Line 335 and 360 - wrong term (2 instances)
- change "FaxOutServer" to "FaxOutService"

Line 418 - number should be word
- change "0" to "zero" at end-of-line

Line 423 and 530 - ambiguous terms
- change "Job Receipt and Document Receipt"
  to "FaxOutJobReceipt and FaxOutDocumentReceipt"

Line 460 - wrong spacing
- change "FaxOutDocument Processing" to "FaxOutDocumentProcessing"

Line 477 - wrong spacing
- change "FaxOutJob Description" to "FaxOutJobDescription"

Line 489 - wrong spacing
- change "FaxOutJob Processing" to "FaxOutJobProcessing"

Line 525 - ambiguous term
- change "with one Job" to "with one FaxOutJob"

Line 536 - wrong spacing
- change "FaxOutDocument Receipt" to "FaxOutDocumentReceipt"

Line 541 - wrong spacing
- change "FaxOutDocument Status" to "FaxOutDocumentStatus"

Line 565 - wrong spacing
- change "FaxOutDocument Description" to "FaxOutDocumentDescription"

Line 577 - wrong spacing
- change "FaxOutDocument Processing" to "FaxOutDocumentProcessing"

Line 586 - wrong case
- change "Remote FaxOut Client" to "remote FaxOut Client"

Line 617 - ambiguous verb
- change "may contain" to "can contain" (non-conformance term)

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