Hi Bill and Smith,
I'll write a revised Last Call response from High North.
I object very strongly to the complete removal of the section 2.1
Conformance
Terminology, instead of the dropping of MUST and REQUIRED.
The former section 5 Conformance Requirements should be named
Implementation Recommendations.
Within section 5, the word MUST should be changed to all-caps SHOULD.
All of which would be consistent with many Best Practices specs from IETF,
ITU-T, and ISO.
Losing the all-caps SHOULDs is a critical fault in the current text.
Cheers,
- Ira
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On Fri, May 19, 2017 at 1:55 PM, <wamwagner at comcast.net> wrote:
> Hi Smith,
>> Thank you for your comments. At this point, I am unsure whether Ira or I
> should address Last Call comments. However, since several of your comments
> relate to the updates I made, I will respond with my thoughts. At any rate,
> since Ira is very busy, I would be happy to take care of editorial issues,
> leaving technical issues to those more familiar with the subject. Ira,
> please let me know if this is OK with you.
>> 1. There are 3 sentences that start with "Originally”:- Yes. the
> second and third instances can simply be removed, with it being clear the
> original “Originally” still holds. Although, I am not fond of “originally”
> since it is unclear when that was. Perhaps the paragraph might start with
> “Before the introduction of open Print standards…”?
> 2. All instances of "RFC 2911" should be changed to cite "RFC 8011". -
> Yes, sorry I missed these. A global change will work.
> 3. Should the title be something other than simply "Recommendations"?
> -"Implementation Recommendations" would work, if that is preferred. I would
> avoid "Conformance Recommendations" in a best practices document since it
> sounds too much like a formal specification.
> 4. "Implementations of this Best Practices document conform to...- "
> Well, I was trying to avoid formal conformance words. Perhaps it would be
> better to use the wording at the start of the section “ implementations
> that are in accord with this Best Practices document conform to the …”
> 5. "Implementations of this Best Practices document follow..." Again,
> trying to avoid conformance terms. I do not see where “should” is
> necessary. Perhaps it would be better “Implementations in accord with this
> Best Practices document follow”.
>>>> Thanks, Bill Wagner
>>>>>> *From: *Kennedy, Smith (Wireless Architect) <smith.kennedy at hp.com>
> *Sent: *Thursday, May 18, 2017 10:57 PM
> *To: *PWG Semantic Model v3 Reflector <sm3 at pwg.org>; Kennedy, Smith
> (Wireless Architect) <smith.kennedy at hp.com>; Ira McDonald
> <blueroofmusic at gmail.com>; Paul Tykodi <ptykodi at tykodi.com>; William A
> Wagner <wamwagner at comcast.net>
> *Subject: *HP Inc. has reviewed the JDFMAP specification and has comments
>>>> Greetings,
>>>> A few editorial comments:
>>>> * Section 3.1 : There are 3 sentences that start with "Originally, ...".
>>>> * Section 3.1, line 272 : All instances of "RFC 2911" should be changed to
> cite "RFC 8011" (references in section 9 are already updated).
>>>> * Section 5, line 795 : Should the title be something other than simply
> "Recommendations"? Like for instance "Implementation Recommendations" or
> "Conformance Recommendations"?
>>>> * Section 6, line 841 : "Implementations of this Best Practices document
> conform to..." >>> "Implementations of this Best Practices document should
> conform to..." (missing should) ?
>>>> * Section 7, line 858 and 862 : "Implementations of this Best Practices
> document follow..." >>> "Implementations of this Best Practices document
> should follow..." (missing should) ?
>>>>>> Smith
>>>> /**
>> Smith Kennedy
>> Wireless Architect - Client Software - IPG-PPS
>> Standards - IEEE ISTO PWG / Bluetooth SIG / Wi-Fi Alliance / NFC Forum
> / USB IF
>> Chair, IEEE ISTO Printer Working Group
>> HP Inc.
>> */
>>>>>>>>>