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SM> FW: PWG-IPP> Last Call Comments on IPP "-actual" Attributes Docum ent

From: Hastings, Tom N (hastings@cp10.es.xerox.com)
Date: Thu Jan 23 2003 - 00:33:28 EST

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    For the Semantic Model Team meeting on Thursday.

    Ron,
    Do you have a document the covers "ISTO requirements"?

    Harry had said a while ago that the ISTO was working on a revised template
    and/or requirements. Has any progress been made on that?

    Ira, Dennis, and I thought that it would be better to have the Abstract and
    names of the authors on the first page, in case the ISTO is accepting
    suggestions on their format.

    Tom

    -----Original Message-----
    From: Ron.Bergman@hitachi-ps.us [mailto:Ron.Bergman@hitachi-ps.us]
    Sent: Wednesday, January 22, 2003 15:37
    To: pwg-ipp@pwg.org
    Subject: PWG-IPP> Last Call Comments on IPP "-actual" Attributes
    Document

    Technically the document looks very sound. The following comments
    are primarily editorial.

    1. RFC 2565 and 2566 are obsolete. It is not appropriate to reference
       obsolete documents, especially as a normative reference. See
          Line 146 (in section 1 Introduction)
          Line 228 (in section 3 -actual attributes)
          Line 331 - 336 (in section 7.1 Normative References

    2. In lines 151 & 152 recommend changing "(or are going to print)" to
       "(or are expected to be printed)" to be more consistent with the
       example in section 3.3.

    3. In line 239 remove "that has the" and all of the text in the
       following line. This additional text adds nothing and results in
       a sentence that is very difficult to read.

    4. In lines 279 and 280 there is a strange split (by WORD) of the
       string "-attribute".

    5. The formatting of the document is not per ISTO requirements.
       Specifically page numbering and headers. Is there a procedure
       for format review prior to final publication? I propose that
       this needs to be established.

            Ron Bergman
            Hitachi Printing Solutions



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