Thanks for the feedback.
> -----Original Message-----
> From: Ron Bergman [mailto:rbergma@hitachi-hkis.com]
> Sent: Thursday, July 27, 2000 8:33 AM
> Bob,
>
> The improvements you made to the specification look great!
> It is now much better organized and easier to follow.
Thanks.
>
> I did find the following in my quick review of the pdf version
> (draft-ietf-ipp-not-spec-04.txt July 13, 2000)
>
> line 653: 'job-purged' S/B 'job-stopped'
fixed
>
> line 978: This heading does not match the subject in 7.1
> I suggest removing 7.0 and changing 7.1 to 7.0.
added sentence
>
> line 984: Change to read "This section defines the Event
> Notification Attributes."
made a slightly different change
>
> line 1075: Table five lists "printer-up-time", but we have
> gone to the trouble of defining an equivalent
> "notify-printer-up-time". So why not use it
> here.
I didn't change because "notify-printer-up-time" is not present in a Per-Job
Subscription Object but "printer-up-time" is always in a Printer Object.
>
> line 1090: Table 6 lists "job-id", why not "notify-job-id".
I didn't change because "notify-job-id" is not present in a Per-Printer
Subscription Object and such a Subscription Object could listen to Job
Events, such as job-completion which contains the "job-id" of the completed
job in the Event Notification.
>
> line 1696: First column in the table is "Attribute" S/B
> "Operation". The first table entry does not
> fit with the subject and S/B removed.
fixed.
>
> line 1806: "Subscription Attributes" S/B "Subscription
> Description Attributes".
cannot find
>
> line 1845: Remove "(Editor)"
fixed
>
> line 1891: Remove "(Editor)"
fixed
>
>
> Ron Bergman
> Hitachi Koki Imaging Solutions
>
>
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