Here are my comments on the latest version of the documents:
Pg. 6, Other Terminology
additional spaces in definition for Application
need to add definition for CorrelationID
Pg. 6, Acronyms
Dynamic Host *Configuration* Protocol
Pg. 7, Rationale
Remove statement about personal firewalls.
Pg. 8, Section 4.1
Will it really be in "Annex x" or a separate document.
Pg. 9, Attributes
Need to add the string definitions for Version in Firmware,
Downloadable Application, and Resident Application.
References to Numeric Version in [PA-TNC] should be 4.2.3, not 3.2.3.
References to Port Filter in [PA-TNC] should be 4.2.6, not 3.2.6.
Do we want to add verbiage to Firewall about only specify open/closed
ports with assumption that others are closed/open? (Like NEA)
HCD_Downloadable_Application_Name has: " ... administrative or
maintenance offline update ..." the word "offline" is out of place.
Need to "keep together" on HCD_Certification_State
Pg. 10, Attributes
HCD_Certification_State : "Since it is being ..." What does this
mean? Need to remove.
HCD_Configuration_State: change "...include such items default
..." to "... include such items as default ..."
Pg. 11, Conformance
Need to add strings for Version and make the string and/or numeric
Lots of references to "null terminated UTF-8 string" Need to know
if we need "null terminated"
Pg. 7, 4.2.2
Add Compliance result codes (???)
Pg. 7, SMI
Bit 24-31 should be set to 0.
Pg. 8, 4.5.3
Length = 3 octets, but 32-bit value.
Only blocked or only open, but don't mix them.
Pg 8, 4.5.5
Add references to Attributes document.
Pg. 9, Bits 8 through 32
Bits are 0-31
Pg. 10, 4.6.8
Need to add CorrelationID
Pg. 11, 4.6.15
Specify the length is in bits.
Pg. 12, table
Renumber Code and rename it Sub-Type Code
David H. Whitehead
Lexmark International, Inc.